Nine lives which hold different outcomes
One life could hold adventures
Another could hold laziness
But never differentiated in curiousness
Always up to something new
Or to try something different.
Or a spontaneous expression of gratitude,
Leaving little presents for everyone
Wanting to feel needed and appreciated,
But not enough to be deemed as an attention seeker
Not expressing to others with words
Yet with actions instead.
However being a person with nine lives
There is bound to be luck in the air
Varying from tiny things to extensive things
Sharing the luck with others,
Making them laugh and smile.
Giving them a moment of happiness.
It can be deceiving at times
Although being something that’s adventurous
Is not an easy hightail journey
It can be difficult and troublesome
But having nine lives
Makes it entertaining.
This is a really well made, I knew that you were relating to a cat, even without mentioning the word "cat" at all. Also, I can see how you relate to a cat, since how cats have nine lives and you connect yourself to aspects and personalities of cats to yourself, lazy, lucky, deceitful, these are personalities of cats that you connected to yourself
ReplyDeleteI honestly, don't know what to say for your poem because, it was just amazingly written and authentic. I really appreciate the great use of word choice because, it enhanced the metaphor and, it was fun to read. Also, I enjoyed that little pun, you added in the last stanza it added humor into the poem.
ReplyDeleteHOWEVER, the only thing I really have to say, is in one particular line which is, "It can be difficult and troublesome," the two words are closely related so, I believe if you use a word that means both of those things it can make your poem even more amazing than it already is. But, really great job Clarissa!!!!!!!!!
Also, some lines like, "yet with actions instead," should replace yet with but, because in the previous line you say you don't express your feelings with words but, with actions and, yet is not used for that sort of line. If you know, what I mean.
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