My father is in the military. Some people may take that as that I basically get whatever what I want. But that's not the case what so ever! I don't get to see my dad on my birthday, I don't get to see any other family members during Christmas or Thanksgiving. As of August 24, I won't be seeing my dad for a whole year, because he has orders to go to Bahrain. A couple years ago, again I didn't get to see my father for a year. The only two times I saw him was in the beginning of June. He had to leave the day before my birthday and then again during Christmas Eve. We had to open our presents early because of our time zone difference. But hey I'm not complaining about opening my presents early. My mom even said that when we were younger our dad was gone for a few months and when he came back, me and my sister didn't know who he was. Unlike most people, I don't see my grandparents a lot. Or my aunts and uncles, or my cousins. The only family member I saw was six months ago when my grandpa came out to watch me and my siblings during my parents anniversary. Other than that my other family members never visit.
My family doesn't say 'I love you' a lot, because of this. I would like it to be said more, but what can I do about it? But when we do say, 'I love you' it's meaningful. When my family and I say it, it means that 'I will always love you no matter what' or it could mean, 'I miss you and I can't wait to come back.' When ever my parents say 'I love you' to me I feel better when I'm feeling down. Even though I don't see my dad or my other family members, besides my mom and siblings, I still will love them and I know they will love me. We all know that'll be there for anyone in my family, not matter what. Rather it be through a phone call or in person.
'I love you' is a very universal term, but to my family, the Levai's, it mean more than a silly 'I love you' here and there. Our phrase makes us feel happy and even though we don't say it much, we all have our own little meaning behind it. It makes us feel included into our family and no matter what happens. We will be there for anyone in our family, no matter what. I had asked my sister what she thought Levai meant, and she said, "Awesome." To some point, I believe her. My family, the Levai's, are awesome.
I really liked how you took such a generic phrase that everyone in the world kno ws and turned it into how special it means to you and your family. Also, I liked how you said that "I love you" meant other things such as "I miss you and I can't wait to come back." One thing you can work on is in the 2nd paragraph, I think it would look better if you combined your 4th and 5th sentence.
ReplyDeleteOverall, great way to make a universal phrase look so special to your family. Great use of past memories which makes the essay seem more legit. Although, one thing that you can work on is make your topic sentence in the second paragraph more interesting . It is too short and basic for me. But great essay overall.
DeleteInteresting to see how your perception of a generic phrase has a deeper and more heartfelt meaning to it. The thesis is well covered throughout a well structured essay with what seems to be no grammatical errors. The voice is calm and calling with personal thoughts being well told in a meaning to heart. The essay is enlightening and delves a hearty perception to a typical saying to your family.
ReplyDeleteMS(3-) GOOD FIRST DRAFT. YOU MIGHT WANT TO WATCH OUT FOR STORIES RUNNING TO LONG THAT WE GET CONFUSED TO WHAT THE POINT IS. THE SECOND PARAGRAPH CAN BE SHORTENED AND SUMMARIZED A BIT MORE. REMEMBER EXPLAIN IN DETAIL THE IMPORTANT THINGS AND CUT OUT INFORMATION THAT ISN'T NEEDED. I RATHER READ A STORY ABOUT USING THE ACTUAL PHRASE OR EXPLAIN MORE HOW OFTEN IT IS USED OR WHEN IT IS USED.
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